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Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued by many that the crime rate has increased in many parts of the world and the best way to control is to enhance the police on the roads. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 as the policemen will be very effective in
this
, but the creation of awareness in the masses will
also
 help in
this
 struggle. On the one hand, increasing the army will be helpful to control the criminals.
Firstly
, the law enforcing agencies on the streets will create a deterrence in the population.
Secondly
, the laws will be implemented in true letter and spirit.
Moreover
, the individuals with bad intentions will be afraid of getting caught and being punished. So, all
this
 will produce a safe environment for the living.
For example
, the government of Belgium has increased the strength of forces to counter terrorism.
On the other hand
, the state should inculcate a sense of responsibility in its citizens. There should be mass campaigns organized at the national level to create a feeling of hatred against those who break the laws.
Furthermore
, every individual must be given basic training of self defence and to combat with the terrorists.
Although
, it's a difficult task, but it will help in decreasing
such
 heinous activities.
For instance
, the Switzerland has almost no army and still it has negligible criminal activity due to the educated populace. To conclude, I believe that the rulers should invest both in the education of the people and expansion of the soldiers to counter the law and order situations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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