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Some people think that activities during the free time should be planned while others disagree. Discuss both sides and include examples and relevant data from your own experience.

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Some people like to
plan
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 activities, even for free
time
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, whereas some others has opposing idea. In my opinion, free
time
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 should not
plan
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 and it is better people feel free and relax during leisure
time
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 and do whatever they want.
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 essay will argue two opposing ideas, plus my experience. On the one hand, planning help people to manage their
time
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 and money, even during leisure
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. Some people feel
absurdity
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the absurdity
 without a
plan
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. In some way, have a schedule give them the
sense
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 of victory and help them to prevent wasting
time
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 and enjoy each minute of their life.
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, planning on a short trip during spare
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 has many advantages for people who are
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
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 and money, knowing the timetable of public vehicles, and the location of places you want to visit. So,
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, a schedule can facilitate the life, but sometimes it can be boring.
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, have a free
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 without a
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 with emancipation has a positive effect on our spirit. As we work like a robot all the
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, the stress and pressure of life and work effect on our health.
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, having an unplanned
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 induce the
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 of freedom to us. According to psychologies, the
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 of freedom can recover and refresh our body and mind.
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, playing music, camping in the nature and spending
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 with friends make positive feel. So, it is true that apparently a
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 without a
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 is like losing
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, but mentally relaxation and unleash
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 cannot replace with any
plan
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. To sum up, I totally believe that leisure
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 without a
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 not only does not caused emptiness feeling, it
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 makes a
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 of calm. Have a
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 without control and with the best will in the world has
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worked
 like a medicine for the spirit.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • free time
  • planned activities
  • unplanned activities
  • time management
  • spontaneous enjoyment
  • efficiency
  • balance
  • flexibility
  • anecdotal evidence
  • scheduling
  • unstructured
  • unexpected joy
  • stress relief
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