Scientists agree that many people are eating too much junk food and it is damaging their health. Some people think that these problems can be solved by educating people to eat less junk food. Other people believe that education will not work. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Over the
last
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decade, consumption of fast foods or processed foods has been increased significantly. While some believe that educating individuals can help solve the problem, others argue that
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essay will discuss both the views and will support the former idea. On the one hand, instructing people
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on
the right path to consume healthy
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is vital.
Government
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The government
should make advertisements explaining the negative effects because of percentage of additives, fats and sugars present in junk
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, and provide information regarding
consumption
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the consumption
of
healthy diet
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a healthy diet
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, 2018 survey results conducted by
Japan Health Foundation
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the Japan Health Foundation
showed that 30 percent of people reduced the intake of unhealthy
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because of the campaign and advertisements conducted by government.
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encourages others to follow the same steps,
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is, towards
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
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, some pupils say that positive outcomes wouldn’t be produced with the necessary education. Mostly, pupils are unable to leave the habit of eating unhealthy
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because it tastes better than home
food
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. For
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reason, even though necessary steps implemented, desired outcomes cannot be seen.
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, while Maggi noodles is banned recently, 80 out of 100 people in India when interviewed have no issue eating it in the future. Even if the desired outcomes are unfavourable, I believe striving hard for a change might bring positive impact in the long term. To conclude,
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two different views concerning junk
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is discussed
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are discussed
, I would argue that instructing through advertisements and other helpful campaigns would lead to promising results in the distant future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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