You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open until midnight. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, - Complain about the situation - Say why this is a problem - And propose ways to reduce the noise

#university #residence #levels #noise #campus #restaurant #midnight #governor #situation

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Hi John, I am Tina, one of the University

residence

Change to a plural noun

residences

show examples

from the North Wing which is located near to the newly open campus restaurant, Blessing Restaurant, which

open

Add a missing verb

is open

show examples

until midnight. The café has not been a blessing to me because

since

Add the comma(s)

,since

show examples

the day they open

last

Linking Words

week, there was a constant noise especially after 10 PM every single day.

This

Linking Words

raise

Change the verb form

raises

show examples

a huge problem

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

since the noise is coming right at the

rest

Correct your spelling

best

show examples

time for most of the residences. To add fuel

into

Change preposition

show examples

the fire, exam week will be coming in two weeks. I believe

this

Linking Words

will highly affect our concentration for having

lack

Correct article usage

a lack

show examples

sleeps

Change the wording

sleep

periods of sleep

nights of sleep

show examples

at night.

Therefore

Linking Words

, I suggest that the restaurant manager to enforced a new rule to limit the selling and consuming alcohol after 9 PM.

Thus

Linking Words

such

Linking Words

wild

party

Fix the agreement mistake

parties

show examples

triggered by alcohol will be reduced and

hopefully

Add a comma

,hopefully

show examples

the noise will be well controlled. Thank you for your attention to

this

Linking Words

matter. Hope the regulation could be implied soon. Yours sincerely, Tina.

Submitted by agustina1508 on Thu Nov 28 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

166 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5
band
In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Health issues that caused by junk food consumption is increasing in some countries. Governments need to taxing all these fast food companies higher as a consequence of their products. Personally, I do not agree with the statement for several reasons and I will explain it further in the next paragraphs.
5.5
band
Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of foods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Most people believe that businesses and outlets have to decrease the level of packing of the roducts, In contrast, some contend that customers should refrain from purchasing items with excessive packing.
5
band
Many people think that money is important to achieve happiness. What is the importance of money to happiness? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.
In this 21st century, every individual is in the race to make more money than everyone .People think that in achieving happiness money plays a vital role. In this essay, I will discuss the ways how important money is to be happy.
4.5
band
Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, education has changed drastically from what it used to be, from the teaching strategies to the mechanisms applied in evaluations. This approaching has brought new ideas about how students' decisions should have a different impact in matters such as the spare time in their scheduls. It is disagreed that students should manage their schooling time. Analysing how a majority of students are not mature enough to take such decisions, and the way that scholars must stick to a commitment (regarding their scheduls) in hopes of developing a sense of responsability in their lives will support this.
4.5
band
Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
While it is widely believe that young people should attend to a full-time education course up to at least 18 years old in order to cultivate the essential knowledges efficiently, others argue that this only possible if the family were financially stable. Hence, I personally support the former statement as it can results in several positive effects along with importance of the government to accompanied this scheme will be discussed further in this essay.

The Greeting

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problem as a result of eating to much fast food. It is neccesary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of foods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people think that money is important to achieve happiness. What is the importance of money to happiness? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?