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You are living in a University residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open until midnight. Write a letter to the governor of the University. In your letter, - Complain about the situation - Say why this is a problem - And propose ways to reduce the noise

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Hi John, I am Tina, one of the University
residence
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 from the North Wing which is located near to the newly open campus restaurant, Blessing Restaurant, which
open
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 until midnight. The café has not been a blessing to me because
since
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 the day they open
last
 week, there was a constant noise especially after 10 PM every single day.
This
raise
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 a huge problem
,
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 since the noise is coming right at the
rest
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 time for most of the residences. To add fuel
into
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 the fire, exam week will be coming in two weeks. I believe
this
 will highly affect our concentration for having
lack
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 of
sleeps
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sleep
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 at night.
Therefore
, I suggest that the restaurant manager to enforced a new rule to limit the selling and consuming alcohol after 9 PM.
Thus
,
such
 wild
party
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 triggered by alcohol will be reduced and
hopefully
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 the noise will be well controlled. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. Hope the regulation could be implied soon. Yours sincerely, Tina.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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