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Some people think it’s a good idea to wear uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people across the globe believe, it is
stupendous idea
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a stupendous idea
 to create a dress code
at
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in
 the workplace.
However
, I partly agree with
this
 statement and believe that dressing depends on the nature and types of job. Productivity and responsibility of an individual
is not linked
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are not linked
 with
outfit what
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outfit, what
 he or
she wears in
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she wears
.
To begin
 with, there are certain roles and responsibilities in professional world which needs a proper dressing sense and add more values to their day-to-day chore.
For instance
, a salesman is always on the run and meet with people of
different nation
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different nations
a different nation
 and region. Their attire has nothing to do with their daily output, but may leave
good or bad impression
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a good or bad impression
 and could affect social interaction, which is highly essential in the field of sales. In the sector of aviation, it is mandatory to follow dress code. Well-dressed air hostesses and flight stewards attracts customers and bring more revenue
for
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to
airline company
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the airline company
. Setting up an environment of formal fabric in a corporation will add umpteen benefits to work surrounding, like it will minimise the feeling of inferiority and boost up discipline.
On the other hand
, professionals like computer operator who spend an enormous amount of time in front of
screen
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the screen
a screen
screens
 and deals mainly with internal staff, his output is not going to be affected by outfit. There are several other jobs like delivery boy, tea boy, coordinator and draftsmen where accomplishment and progress of task is not connected with
attire
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the attire
. To conclude, prior creating and implementing any rule of garment an organization shall look into every side and gives more weightage to social relation.
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