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Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally observed that smart devices
such
 as smart phones, tablets, gaming consoles and laptops are easily available to children today. It is argued that that
use
 of these devices by children is diminishing their
creativity
.
This
 essay agrees that excessive
use
 of
such
 gadgets by children affects their
creativity
 severely.
This
 essay will discuss how it is affecting the critical thinking in children and making them more dependent on
technology
. Excessive
use
 of gadgets by young people restricts their thinking ability. Since these devices are designed in a way which show its users to just follow a set of instructions for achieving a result without any thinking critically on their part.
This
 makes the users of these devices to
use
 less of their brain capabilities and restricts them from exploring their mind. According to a research published in a popular journal. Excessive
use
 of smart devices slows down the problem solving process in a human brain by 10% in adults while in children
this
 percentage is almost double. Since children are the ones who pick up things at a fast pace and excessive
use
 of
technology
 daily can become a habit.
Therefore
, making them more dependent on
technology
.
This
 dependence on
technology
 in
such
 a young age can have lasting impact to their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 development. According to psychologists excessive
technology
 users are likely to start thinking like robots which can not only affect their personal life but their social life as well. In conclusion, gadgets used by young people
reduces
Suggestion
reduce
 their
creativity
 and I strongly agree with the argument and in order to avoid the loss of
creativity
 in our children, parents should ensure that their children
uses
Suggestion
use
 the
technology
 as moderately as possible.

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