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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer.He/She has ask for your advice. write a letter to your friednd.in your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you whould like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Maria, hope you are fine, I know that you have decided to join the camping group to spend your summer vacation and you asked my opinion about that. You know that I went on
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camping a couple of times and
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 be honest, I should say that it was really enjoyable. But don’t forget to check some points
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had a really supportive and intimate leader. She was constantly checking everything to see if we were comfortable or not.
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, she was really sensitive about choosing the people who were joining the team as she believed that good accompanies can make a camping memory memorable or horrible, and I should admit that I totally agree with her. Everything was absolutely nice except not having a toilet which was kind of torturing for me.
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, I didn’t feel safe sleeping outside. Anyway, considering all these points, I am still interested in attending another camping as the negative points could not stop me from enjoying the moments I had there. So, if you want me to join you
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 event, let me know the exact time as I need to ask for off in my job. Regards, Mojgan
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Language use
To further enhance your letter, consider varying your sentence structures more and using a wider range of vocabulary to better express nuances in your advice and experiences.
Organization
Try to explicitly state the disadvantages within their own paragraph to maintain clarity and ensure each idea is clearly explored.
Structure
The letter has a clear structure, with an opening, body, and closing that adhere to the task's requirements.
Content
Your personal reflections and advice are well integrated into the letter, making it engaging and informative.
Tone
The tone of the letter is appropriately informal and friendly, fitting the context of writing to a friend.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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