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Some people think that shops should sell food products from the local areas rather than products from other countries.Do you agree or disagree

#people #shops #food #products #areas #countries
It is
irrefutbale
impossible to deny or disprove
irrefutable
 that shops play a
siginificant
important in effect or meaning
significant
 role in our daily lifestyle. I agree with the statement that shops should sell products from the local areas, as
this
 would be beneficial for country in many
prespects
(often used with 'pay') a formal expression of esteem
respects
. I shall put forth my arguments in following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, selling products from the local areas would considerably
endrose
be behind; approve of
endorse
endures
indoors
 one nation's economy, as
government
Suggestion
the government
 will not import items from other countries.
Moreover
, local items will be available in cheap price and fresh, because these products were prepared by the country itself.
Consequently
, prices will not hike for many years and people will
pursui
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
 local products.
Likewise
, local business will climb by
this
, and more items will be available for persons in future.
Similarly
, people will respect and consume items of their nation.
Furthermore
, people
bying
the act of buying
buying
 local items from
shop
Suggestion
a shop
the shop
 would save a
substantional
fairly large
substantial
 amount of money. To
further
 strengthen my point, most of the local products are made according to one nation's
requirements
Suggestion
requirement
, as compared to the product from
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 country.
Likewise
, foods are prepared and packed with the requirement to match culture and taste. To conclude, I pen sown saying that, local shops should sell the local products, as it would increase economy, as well as products will be available in less rate.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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