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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: say which part-time course you booked explain why you need to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course

#course #college #administrator
Dear Sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. My name is Ramisha Nouman and
last
 week I enrolled in a Fashion and design
course
. I am writing
this
 letter in regard to cancelling my enrollment in the previous
course
 and want to enrol again in another
course
. I will mention the reason for the cancellation in the following letter statement. I am very fond of drawing, sketching and illustration and at the same time, I have a keen interest in clothes design so I chose to enrol in a fashion and design
course
 but my friend who lives next to my house enrolled herself in a fine and arts
course
 and we both have different timings but have an issue of conveyance and she bought all the stuff so she requests me to cancel the enrollment in Fashion and designing and enrol in the same
course
 as her so, We can manage our conveyance issue mutually. I hope you will understand my circumstances and allow me to
enroll
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 in a fine arts
course
 and cancel my enrollment in the previous
course
. Yours Faithfully, Ramisha.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Utilize a clear and effective structure in your letter. Introduce your letter with a formal greeting and provide a clear paragraph for each aspect of the task.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity and readability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a formal closing statement to your letter to maintain a professional tone.
Task Achievement
While you have addressed all the bullet points from the task, aim to provide more developed explanations for your reasons and requests to strengthen your argument.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistently formal and polite tone throughout the letter, which you have generally done well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Part-time course
  • Cancellation
  • Booking
  • Administrator
  • Financial situation
  • Work commitments
  • Health issues
  • Inconvenience
  • Transfer
  • Subject area
  • Schedule
  • Format
  • Cancellation policy
  • Refund process
  • Assistance
  • Understanding
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