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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often argued that in some post graduate lectures the amount of gender attendance is quite different. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and I think that it is not due to university qualification for attending to a
subject
 but more about
student
 preference and future
orientation
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and give reasons of my choice.
First
 of all, I believe that
student
 chooses their course
subject
 according their preference. They can choose the
subject
 they want to study and do not attend to other they do not like
such
 as mathematic because it is too difficult to understand.
This
 method promotes better results for
student
 and help them to be more focus.
For instance
, it is reported that most males are attracted by engineering than female. The reason of these results is due to their education males preferred studies sometimes related to mechanic, cars and aerospace whereas females prefer medicine, art and literacy.
Therefore
,
this
 observation is more a stigmatization than the reality. It is for
this
 reason we can find women in mechanic course.
Moreover
, the choice of lectures depends on their professional
orientation
. University gives the opportunity to their students to choose their
subject
. It is on their responsibility to find the most appropriate
subject
 for their profession.
For example
 a
student
 who wants to work as doctor will choose subjects
such
 as chemistry; biochemistry
although
 a future computer scientist will prefer to learn more about informatics and mathematics than read a book and write essays for a literacy class.
Thus
, it is more appropriate to say that the number people per
subject
 depend on their
orientation
 and not their gender. In conclusion
,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 i strongly believe that the number o
f
Suggestion
students, according
students according
student
 according their gender do not depend on the university decision but on
student
 preference and work
orientation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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