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Some people think climate change has a negative impact on business, while others think that it provides more business options. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Every situation or natural disturbance creates opportunities for the person where some say that
climate
change
 has a negative impact on
business
 and the opposition says that it provides more options to do
business
. I will put my viewpoint with reasons in the next paragraphs. Some
people
 do specific
business
 for the long term and make only a few updates when required some
people
 do
business
 seasonally or
according to
changes
 in the weather. Any
business
 can be affected by
changes
 in a nation
such
 as
,
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 political
changes
, taxes, interest rates and more, but
climate
change
 is one of the major things impacting
business
.
For example
, Farmers are planting seeds for crops but, sometimes
due to
 heavy or less rain, crops are impacted by floods and they lose money which they invested in cropping.
Change
 is the law of nature and
this
change
 is sometimes beneficial for some
people
.
Due to
 the
change
 in
climate
,
people
 get a chance to do
business
 and some introduce new things to sustain against these
changes
.
For example
, we have three seasons in the world where the demand for raincoats increases during the rainy seasons
whereas
 during the rest of the year, nobody buys raincoats.
Moreover
, our globe getting warmer day by day, so to tackle
this
 situation, many companies have invented A.C. which makes our houses cool and
people
 can feel normal temperature, so these companies are doing
business
 because of the
change
 in the
climate
. Agglomerating all the points elaborated above it can concluded that
climate
change
 can impact
business
 and even create opportunities for
business
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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