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Politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians’ #lives #newspapers
With the advancement in technology, anyone's private
life
 can be published in
newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
newspapers
. I agree that
politicians
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politicians'
 lives should not be published in newspapers or any other medium. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both scenarios
of
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on
this
 serious issue. Politicians private lives should not be discussed no matter how bad or good they are. Discussing someone's private
life
 is taken as a very personal matter and there
is
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are
 no benefits in discussing someone's
life
instead
 it backfires many times
interms
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in terms
 of different controversies.
For example
, In
first
 world countries, It is banned to publish any politician or celebrity
life
 in the newspaper or any other medium to give them total control
on
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of
 their private
life
.
Furthermore
, If it is published in the
newspaper
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newspaper, then
then
 there might be some consequences.
However
, publishing the private
life
 will demoralize the person who is working for the country day and
night resulting
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night, resulting
 the resignation
by
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of
 a person
form
a giver or sender
from
 the duty.
For example
, In Pakistan once there was a general who was very
obidient
dutifully complying with the commands or instructions of those in authority
obedient
 to his
country but
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country, but
 once his private
life
 get published in the media
resulting his
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resulting in his
 resignation from the services right away. To sum up, I believe it is better to avoid publishing anyone private lives
on
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of
 media either they are
politician
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politically
 or not. Despite the
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 and protection of
this
 cause some media will still showcase
politician
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politician's
 private
life
 to increase their channel
viewership
 and ratings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrusion
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • sensationalism
  • privacy
  • public interest
  • collateral damage
  • precedent
  • responsible journalism
  • exploitation
  • democratic processes
  • media culture
  • balance
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