You recently travelled by train on a long journey and you experienced various problems. Write a letter to the train company's head office. In your letter, - Give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat - explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction - ask about what action will be taken to improve the service You should write atleat 150 words

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I am writing

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letter to inform you that I have faced several problems on my recent journey by

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from Multan to Lahore. I reserved the two

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which are

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7 and 8 on 22nd July

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month. I had to travel early morning 6am from the Multan Cantt station. The purpose of my travel is to attend an Annual Conference In Lahore at 2pm.

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, The journey begins with the delay of arrival of the

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by half an hour. I embark on

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journey with my colleague. when we enter our compartment, there is no seat left for us.

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, many of the passengers are in a queue and waiting for the

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to be free. It was a really embarrassing movement for me.

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, I had reserved these

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2 days earlier from departure time.

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, when the

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master arrived to check the tickets I will suggest you take action on all these matters immediately.

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, these problems can have detrimental effects on the

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's reputation. I will suggest two ways to overcome these problems.

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the security of the

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should be increased to control limited passengers.

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, by arranging a training session for the

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masters. I eagerly waiting to look forward to hearing from you. yours truly, ahtsham

muhammadahtsham457Tue Sep 10 2024

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Task Response

Although you mentioned the delay and seat unavailability, you could elaborate slightly more on how these problems affected your journey and your ability to attend the conference.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your letter can benefit from clearer, separate paragraphs for each main idea to improve readability.

Task Response

Your tone is formal and suitable for this type of correspondence.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your letter has a proper greeting and closing that adds to the overall coherence.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

217 words

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