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Politician's private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politician #lives #newspapers
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With the advancement in technology, anyone's private
life
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 can be published in a newspaper. I agree that
politician’s
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politicians’
 lives should not be published in newspapers or any other medium no matter what the story is. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss both scenarios on
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 serious issue. Politicians private lives should not be discussed no matter how bad or good they are. Discussing someone's private
life
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 can be taken as a very personal matter and there are no benefits in discussing someone's
life
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instead
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 it backfires many times in terms of different controversies.
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, In
first
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 world countries, It is banned to publish any politician or celebrity
life
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 in the newspaper or any other medium to give them total control
on
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of
 their private
life
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.
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, If it is published in the newspaper,
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 there might be some consequences.
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, publishing the private
life
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 will demoralize the victim who is working day and night for the country resulting the resignation from the duty.
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, In Pakistan once there was a general who was very obedient to his country, but once his private
life
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get
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gets
 published in the electronic media and other mediums resulting his resignation from the services right away. To sum up, I believe it is better to avoid publishing anyone private lives on electronic media or any other medium either they are a politician or not. Despite the awareness and protection of
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 cause some media will still showcase politician’s private
life
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 to increase their channel views and ratings.
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