Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leiure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Leiure

the hero of William Shakespeare's tragedy who was betrayed and mistreated by two of his scheming daughters

Lear

lair

leisure

is the free

time

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that they can use to

rejuvanate

cause (a stream or river) to erode, as by an uplift of the land

rejuvenate

and relax. Nowadays, young adults have been shopping very often. It is

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seen that they go for shopping as a

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

activity rather than choosing a hobby for themselves,

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however some

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however, some

people might look at

this

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sitiation

the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time

situation

as a

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development

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developer

but I think

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is a

negavtive

characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features

negative

development

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due to various reasons.

Firstly

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, young adults can use the shopping

time

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to develop a new skill or spend the

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

time

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by involving themselves into a new hobby.

Secondly

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

time

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is for relaxation and shopping activity can

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be stressful as

most young

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younger

adults are

influnced

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influenced

by social media and they are under immense pressure to maintain their image in a certain way on social media and

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in front of their friends for which they require to shop certain brands.

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, My client only carries LV bags when she goes out with her friends to show that she can afford expensive bags, but she has to work really hard to make a lot of money to shop for one LV bag.

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, she does not show her struggle and stress to her friends and shopping is a stressful process for her.

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, Shopping is a part of one

persons

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person's

life and not the whole life, It can be relaxing for some

people whereas

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people, whereas

stressful process for some,

therefore

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young adults can define their life and create

seperate

act as a barrier between; stand between

separate

time

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for shopping and

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

based on their own personal

preferrance

a strong liking

preference

preferences

. Many people might think that it is a

postive

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

development

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as it adds on to the Country's economy,

nevertheless

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it is

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creating a psychological impact on young adults if they

can not

cannot

understand the difference between

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

time

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and shopping

time

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and getting blindly influenced by social media

influencers

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. In conclusion, I would say that there must be clarity between how to spend

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

time

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and shopping

time

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however it

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however, it

is a very personal choice as it can be relaxing for some young adults to shop. I believe that it is a negative

development

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and young adults might go through various psychological issues due to increasing stress of shopping and not using the

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leiure

time available for ease and relaxation

leisure

earlier

time

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appropriately.

Fri Nov 29 2019

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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leiure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

The media has become too influential in people’s lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

At the present time, the populatiom of some countries includes a reltaively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. do the advantage of this situation outweight disadvantages?

In some countries , more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer , rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes . What are the reason for this? Is this a positive or a negative development ?

The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?