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Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leiure activity in many countries for young adults. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Leiure
the hero of William Shakespeare's tragedy who was betrayed and mistreated by two of his scheming daughters
Lear
lair
leisure
 is the free
time
 that they can use to
rejuvanate
cause (a stream or river) to erode, as by an uplift of the land
rejuvenate
 and relax. Nowadays, young adults have been shopping very often. It is
also
 seen that they go for shopping as a
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
 activity rather than choosing a hobby for themselves,
however some
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however, some
 people might look at
this
sitiation
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
 as a
development
Suggestion
developer
 but I think
this
 is a
negavtive
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
development
 due to various reasons.
Firstly
, young adults can use the shopping
time
 to develop a new skill or spend the
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
 by involving themselves into a new hobby.
Secondly
,
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
 is for relaxation and shopping activity can
also
 be stressful as
most young
Suggestion
younger
 adults are
influnced
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influenced
 by social media and they are under immense pressure to maintain their image in a certain way on social media and
also
 in front of their friends for which they require to shop certain brands.
For instance
, My client only carries LV bags when she goes out with her friends to show that she can afford expensive bags, but she has to work really hard to make a lot of money to shop for one LV bag.
However
, she does not show her struggle and stress to her friends and shopping is a stressful process for her.
Lastly
, Shopping is a part of one
persons
Suggestion
person's
 life and not the whole life, It can be relaxing for some
people whereas
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people, whereas
 stressful process for some,
therefore
 young adults can define their life and create
seperate
act as a barrier between; stand between
separate
time
 for shopping and
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
 based on their own personal
preferrance
a strong liking
preference
preferences
. Many people might think that it is a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
development
 as it adds on to the Country's economy,
nevertheless
 it is
also
 creating a psychological impact on young adults if they
can not
can not
cannot
 understand the difference between
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
 and shopping
time
 and getting blindly influenced by social media
influencers
. In conclusion, I would say that there must be clarity between how to spend
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
 and shopping
time
,
however it
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however, it
 is a very personal choice as it can be relaxing for some young adults to shop. I believe that it is a negative
development
 and young adults might go through various psychological issues due to increasing stress of shopping and not using the
leiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
earlier
time
 appropriately.

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