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many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. do you think this is a good thing?

#people #money #weddings
Expensive weddings are becoming
trend
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a trend
the trend
 nowadays, which attracts mostly couples to invest a huge amount of cash on their marriages. I am not
favour
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favouring
 of
this
 trend.
there
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There
 are several
reasoms
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
reason
 behind their unnecessary spending on their own marriages.
firstly
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Firstly
, they want to show off their status and wealth to society.
people
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People
 invite famous artists to perform
on
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at
for
 their weddings, which indirectly pure drainage of
money
.
for
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For
 example, recently, a famous
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 businessman
mukesh
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Mukesh
ambani
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Ambani
 invited
beyonce
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Beyonce
 on her
daughters
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daughter's
 wedding and gave her billions of dollars.
however
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However
, they can spend
this
 for many
better
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good
 causes to help poor people.
there
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There
 are
meny
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 couples who
wont
will not
won't
want
shre
have in common
share
shared
 their lives together because of lack of
money
.
secondly
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Secondly
, they can save
this
money
 for their future investment to secure their lives.
inconclusion
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In conclusion
Inconclusion
, unnecessary
spemding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
 on weddings is worthless and have no use.
it
Suggestion
It
 can be better save that
money
 to plan their future.

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