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Rich countries often offer money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some individuals agree that developed countries should provide financial help to the underdeveloped and developing countries. Me
an while,
at the same time but in another place
Meanwhile
others believe that other types of aid like medical outreaches to the rural areas, provision of free medications (re
troviral d
rugs), and vaccines go a long way in aiding these countries. I strongly
support
 that other needs rather than monetary
support
 should be given to these countries. Loans and gifts in form of money have been given to some poor countries in order to
support
 the economy.
This
 ha
ve not really been h
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has not really been
had not really been
elpful because, some corrupt politicians steal from the money meant for the establishment and maintenance of some government properties.
For instance
, Nigerian government toke about 28billion na
ira l
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Naira
more
oan from World Bank to build federal roads (en
ugu-o
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Enugu
n
itsha e
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Onitsha
xpress way) in 2001. Those major routes were not built, they were left untouched and the money budgeted for the construction unaccounted.
On the contrary
, giving other supports
such
 as word of advice, medical outreaches by some international NGOs, and provision of free medications and vaccines have helped so many African countries in one way or the other. During the time of Hi
v a
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HIV
nd aids outbreak in Nigeria, WHO created awareness and gave away anti re
trovial d
(computer science) the operation of accessing information from the computer's memory
retrieval
rugs to the affected. In conclusion, giving other aid is better and gives pr
oductive result t
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productive results
the productive result
han monetary
support
 which probably will be squandered.

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