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Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the world. With the serious results for the environment , what do you think can be done to solve the problem?

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Mankind has always been dependent on forest reserves for various necessities of life.
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 due to increasing population and huge industry demand
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 percentage of forests
has decreased
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have decreased
 significantly on earth.
This
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 has invited a range of problems starting from soil erosion to disruption in
water cycle
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the water cycle
, loss of of animal habitat and aquatic life, rainfall and ultimately global warming.To reduce the adverse effects of
deforestation
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 it is necessary to take steps immediately. Many world leaders and organizations
has come
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have come
 forward to address the issue of
deforestation
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. It is necessary that governments are encouraged to preserve the forest area and restrict logging industries. Industries can be provided with alternative synthetic material or some money can be invested in the research of the same. Though it takes many years to build a forest
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in many countries new forests are built by plantations artificially and
such
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 experiments should be carried out more. It will be interesting for each country to have a goal where
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a certain percentage
 of
country’s land
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the country’s land
 should be covered with jungles. The awareness among humans is very vital to succeed in stopping
deforestation
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. People should understand the harm it causes to
environment
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the environment
 and human life. The goods made without
deforestation
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 should be more promoted to the common people. The importance of forests should be taught in early education and as a responsible citizen everyone should participate in protecting forests. Forests are natural resources and should be used be used wisely.The critical warnings by nature should not be
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 of our past action and with
combined efforts
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the combined efforts
 of government and citizens
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 problems of
deforestation
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 should be solved promptly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deforestation
  • Biodiversity
  • Afforestation
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable/sustainability
  • Urbanization
  • Timber
  • Infrastructure
  • Indigenous populations
  • Climate change
  • Ecosystem services
  • Ecotourism
  • Biodegradable
  • Renewable resources
  • Carbon footprint
  • Conservation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Enforcement
  • Regulation
  • Awareness campaigns
  • Corporate responsibility
  • Supply chains
  • Illegal logging
  • Satellite monitoring
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