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some people think that going to a fitness center regularly is unnecessary.Instead,they believe that combining occasional exercise(such as for walks)with a balance diet is enough to stay healthy to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A plethora of people have pondered that, going to gyms on
daily basis
Suggestion
a daily basis
 is quite not recommended.Whilst others think that by doing some
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
 occasionally with having a good
diet
 plan will help them to stay hale and hearty.I do not agree with
this
 notion as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel daily a bit workout could help people to stay sound in wind and limb. To
intigrate
make into a whole or make part of a whole
integrate
interact
 with, a healthy mind lives in a healthy
body
.Same way to keep your
body
 healthy, it seems quite necessary that one should do their
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
regulary
in a regular manner
regularly
.
Moreover
, people will always be able to rejuvenate their fatigued mind by doing some
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
 in the gyms under proper training.Trainers could guide the people about their
diet
 plan as it contains multifarious advantages.
For instance
, If people are setting their routine for proper
gyming
the act of playing for stakes in the hope of winning (including the payment of a price for a chance to win a prize)
gaming
filming
 activities and proper
diet
 the it will be
benficial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 for them and their
body
 will be stayed fit always. On the flip side, ample of people have
certain perspective
Suggestion
a certain perspective
 that some how they considered having morning walk and a bit jogging
ocassionaly
now and then or here and there
occasionally
 and
also
 having
nutritious
Suggestion
a nutritious diet
diet
 with
this
,
then
 they will be able to stay fit
nevertheless
 it may causes to exploit their daily routine and the day they will not able to perform some
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
 their
body
 will feel the
fatiguness
.

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