In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this...?

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the
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The
statement says that what are the advantages and disadvantages working or
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
for a year between finishing high school and starting
universitiey
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
studies.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would discuss both advantages and
disadvanteges
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
below. It helps them to earn money and gather
experince
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
.
working
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Working
or travelling makes them more responsible.
it
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It
makes the
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makes, the
more intelligent and they are able to
intreact
act together or towards others or with others
interact
instruct
with new people and
culturs
a particular society at a particular time and place
cultures
.
experence
Suggestion
Experience
Experence
the world and see new places.
On the other
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hand there
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hand, there
are some disadvantages it turns some students to work forever and stop their study.
travelling
Suggestion
Travelling
may make them more addicted to travel more and
thus
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they pay less attention in their study.
working
Suggestion
Working
or travelling makes them sometimes more crazy they
may became
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may become
more desperate and stop
study
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studying
.
by
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By
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
other countries students lose their own cultures. In conclusion,
although
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there are some advantages to travelling or working between high school and university, in my opinion, the disadvantages of
this
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practice outweigh the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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