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All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statement ?

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Learning a foreign
language
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 is very useful nowadays because all of ministries and companies really need the person who can speak
,
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 read, listen and write in other languages. Many people believe that enrolling their children to the English or other
language
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school
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 can help their children more clever and it might help them in the future. In our world, there are more than 4000 languages that have spoken by different natives or countries. But there are the top 5 languages that have been spoken by a lot of people in the world
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 as English, French, Mandarin, Hindi, Spanish. A large number of individuals consider that most of parents nowadays like to enrol their children to English
school
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 or Mandarin
school
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. The numerous of schools
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 increase from days to days. Most of them are English and Mandarin
school
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.
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, in Cambodia, the number of students enrolled in young ages in the English
school
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 has more than 10000 students a year. It keeps increasing every year.
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, it was said that enrolling the children in the foreign
language
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school
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 in the early grades might affect their children's native
language
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.
This
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 could count as a concern too, because nowadays we can see that some of children cannot speak their native
language
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 at all. There are other people think if we want to enrol our children to another
language
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school
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, we should make them learn their native
language
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first
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. In conclusion, parents should let their children study another accent, but they
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 have to be aware about their children as if they can speak their native
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 yet. It might be easier if they study
abroad but
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abroad, but
 it will cause them the consequences if they can't speak their own
language
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 in own country. In my opinion, I think that enrolling your children to foreign
language
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school
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 is a good choice, but we should let them learn their own
language
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first
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