The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Technology is one of the most powerful tools which humans
has
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have
at their disposal. Very often peoples feel isolated due to the limited physical interactions with others.
Although
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there are many advantages of the internet,
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however I
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however, I
agree that it discourages us for
socialtion
a formal organization of people or groups of people
association
and physical interactions.
This
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would be confirmed
with
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by
how
socialtion
a formal organization of people or groups of people
association
in the society has decreased over the
last
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20 years and how children used to play and communicate with each other before as compared to now.
Firstly
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, 20 years back, people were more physically active and used to meet each other
alot
Suggestion
a lot
and played many physical sports together,
however
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nowadays these trends has decreased significantly. As per the article published by Khaleej Times in 2018, it stated that as per the
records
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record
before year 2000, at least 50% of the peoples were
regulary
in a regular manner
regularly
involved in at least one of the sports and
this
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has decreased to about 10% in the year 2018.
This
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fact confirms that peoples' group activities has decreased due to the technological developments.
This
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information hints
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information, hints
us that technology has
seprated
being or feeling set or kept apart from others
separated
peoples
physcially
in accord with physical laws
physically
.
Furthermore
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, previously children used to
physcially
Suggestion
physical
physically
visually
play and enjoy with each
other but
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other, but
it has changed during the time.
For example
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: My nephew, he is only 7 years old,
in
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at
this
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age he
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age, he
should be playing with friends in the garden, but
instead
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he is playing games or watching cartoons throughout the day on the mobile or tablet.
This
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action would result him being an isolated from the society.
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Likewise many
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Likewise, many
other children are following the same trend and as
such
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our future generation would be more or less isolated with each other.
Although
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technology helps us to connect with each other but through the change in the social trend over the past 20 years and changing habits of the kids confirms the fact that technology has
also
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reduced our physical interactions.
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Hence I
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Hence, I
agree that internet discourages people to socialise and
seprates
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separates'
separates
separate
us
physcially
in accord with physical laws
physically
.
Goverments
Suggestion
Governments
should
intiate
increase the likelihood of
invite
few programs to improve the social activities in our society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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