.Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. - Mention about the current sport facilities available - What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced - How the new sports facilities would be a help for the people in your age group

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to request you to provide some new
sports
facilities for the young people of
this
area. I am Kuldeep Singh, a resident of Guru Hargobind Nagar, Phagwara. I am working in HDFC Bank in the NRI branch. Presently, there are not many
sports
facilities in
this
town. Children play
sports
like cricket and hockey on the grounds of the Government High School. But, there is no facility for
sports
after office hours, where people of my age can play any sport. Sir, there is an open ground next to the school, which has become a dumping spot for people to throw garbage and other waste materials.
This
area is under the municipal corporation of the city.
This
place would be ideal for an indoor stadium for games like badminton and lawn tennis. It is my humble request to use
this
place for the stadium.
This
would benefit not only the young office goers
,
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but
also
the children and youth of
this
area.
Such
a place is much needed as we are leading sedentary lives, and some physical activity is imperative for all of us. Hoping for a careful consideration of
this
suggestion. Yours faithfully, Kuldeep Singh
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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the current state of sports facilities to clearly establish the existing gap.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence by adding more transitional phrases between the paragraphs for smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear greeting and closing, maintaining a formal tone throughout.
task achievement
The writing tone is appropriate and respectful for a letter to local authorities.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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