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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

#experts #children #language #school #outweight
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Most parents and teachers believe that kids should start
language
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 learning in their
middleschools
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middle schools
.
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, some elementary schools
also
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 provide foreign
language
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 learning as a test in
educational field
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the educational field
. Obviously, it contains positive as well as
negative influence
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a negative influence
negative influences
. Lingual skills from primary education are always based on the great interests kid's obtained in expressing their feelings. The strong motivation helps students acquire
language
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 with ease and fun, and
then
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 their unshaped mother
language
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 will
also
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 remove the barrier between one
language
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 and another. More importantly, without
exerted
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exerting
 pressing stress from tests and exams, students may devote themselves to
language
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 itself but nothing else
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, the primary education for
language
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 learning is not as perfect as it sounds. The overly flexible timetable for
language
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 learning will never ensure that children have mastered some key features of lingual skills. Compared with that, secondary school will supply more professional lessons with accurate teaching from which children can benefit a lot.
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, if so,
this
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 activity will entirely ruin the interests of
language
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 learning for kids, which shift their flexible foreign
language
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 interests into the forced and test-oriented study all the time.
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,
this
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 should never be put into practice for a better result until secondary schools. Obviously, primary school should
also
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 make some revolutionary changes for a better lingual atmosphere to cater to kids' interests. In sum, all the contributions made to optimize
language
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 learning will benefit both individuals as well as the community, culturally and traditionally, so the adjustments in primary education will be the key to solve
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 educational problem. إنهاء الدردشة اكتب رسالة...

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