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Many old cities around the world are going through a major process of modernization. What are the advantages and disadvantages of modernization?

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We are living in a modern
world
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, to keep pace with the modern
world
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 different old urban areas around the globe is changing through the different
process
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 of
modernization
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. The major
advantage
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 of
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this
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modernization
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process
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 is that it makes our life more convenient,
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, it has some negative
effect
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 on our natural
environment
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. The main
advantage
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 of the
modernization
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 is that it improves our infrastructure, education system and communication sector, which improves our way of living.
Firstly
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, the buildings
of
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in
 residential areas are improved,
as a
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result these
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result, these
 buildings are now more robust to the natural calamities and keep us
more safe
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safer
.
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, the improvement of our education system is caused by the introduction of modern technology, so that students could learn different subjects more conveniently. The
advantage
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 of
modernization
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 has outstanding
effect
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 on communication sector. Now, we can travel anywhere within a short time by using our modern vehicles. These are the few
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advantage
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advantages
 that upgrades our lifestyle.
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, the
process
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 of
modernization
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 has tremendous
effect
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 on our natural
environment
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. The residential areas are built by cutting down the trees. As we know that trees play a vital role
on
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in
 our
living
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lives
, so cutting down the trees
pollute
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pollutes
 our
environment
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.
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this
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, increasing number of vehicles in cities emits carbon-dioxide and other greenhouse gases in the
environment
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. For
this
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 reason, the
world
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’s temperature is increasing day by day, which causes global warming. Due to the global warming, natural disasters are
also
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 increasing every year. To sum up, we could not stop the
modernization
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 of
this
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world
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, it’s an ongoing
process
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. To live in
this
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world
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 we have to face both positive and negative
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effect
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effects
 of the
modernization
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.
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