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Do you think design of buildings have positive or negative impact. Which way it can effect on work and live?

In the present world, the architecture of a building can or cannot be beneficial for its residents. Some
people
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 may be in
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 with the conception that the
designing
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design
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 of the house impacts the life of humans positively,
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 others may differ. In my opinion, the influence of
design
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 may or may not be advantageous to the
people
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 residing in it and requires
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 deliberation. To commence with, the construction and planning of a building can be fruitful for the living beings there. The reason is that a good sound
design
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 encourages proper ventilation and natural light in the house
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 helps to promote good health of the
people
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.
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, north or
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 houses
as
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, as
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 per Vastu science, are considered to be prosperous.
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, the correct planning of the house is of the utmost importance for the
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residents
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. On the flip side, a disaster in the architecture of a building can be dreadful for the owner. To put it in another way, a fault in the
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 can lead to various health and mental problems for the occupants.
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,
people
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 often avoid south-west facing villas because they face the sun at noon, which causes overheating and
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the
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health.
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, it is clear from the above explanation that the wrong plan is not beneficial for the residents. In conclusion, the
constructional
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construction
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 planning of a residence decides its fate, whether it will benefit the owner or not.
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, the influence of
design
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 is either profitable or not for the
people
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 living in it.

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improvement
Add a clear plan in your essay: state your view in the first paragraph, then give two or three ideas with simple facts or examples, and finish with a short end. Make sure all ideas tie to your view.
improvement
Use only common words and short sentences. Check that each paragraph has one main idea and connect the ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'therefore'.
structure
The essay has clear sections with an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
It shows both sides of the topic and gives examples.
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