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Some people say that in all levels of education from primary school to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Most of the people across the globe, believe enormous amount of time is devoted to gain theoretical knowledge rather than hand-on skills. I totally agree with
this
 statement, and believe practical exposure is more important than academic capability. At present, most of the universities follow
traditional pattern
Suggestion
traditional patterns
the traditional pattern
a traditional pattern
 of teaching. The syllabus
mainly focusses
Suggestion
mainly focuses
 on conceptual learning and slot for
useful practical
Accept comma addition
useful, practical
 ability is very less.
For Instance
, an engineering course is totally
technical
Suggestion
technically
 oriented, but pattern of teaching gives less emphasis to gain active skills.
Therefore
, it’s peak time to make an amendment in the method of coaching.
However
, due to poor educational structure, many students are unable to get employment. Indeed, it’s true that
world
Suggestion
the world
 is heading rapidly toward skill oriented era. Now,
organization
Suggestion
the organization
 is giving more weightage to cognitive capability than college qualification.
In addition
 to that, a profound mastery will pave the way for a better career and widen the horizon of thinking. All these advantages of experimental education cannot be snubbed when it comes to shape the career of a student. To conclude, a school must include non-theoretical study in the course of education, which will contribute to a major extent to erect a bright career for
pupil
Suggestion
pupils
the pupil
.
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