Do you think it is better to send criminals to jail or let them receive education or job training?

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All around the world, you cannot find a country without someone committing a

crime

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, it is obvious that we have to cope with criminals. But people are not of the same mind about how to treat them. Some see sending criminals to

prison

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as the best

way

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, while others believe in

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training and education to be helpful and I partially agree with it. In the

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place, it is a good

way

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to encourage criminals to have a normal life. But changing their minds needs a friendly environment as they are close to accept any help or advice from those who are not like them. Here a

rehab

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program could change their attitude in a positive

way

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. At the same time, we should not forget the fact that most of the criminals commit crimes due to their lack of money and

job

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job

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training is what could help them to live a normal life after the

rehab

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can benefit society as well; the period of education and

rehab

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may result in reducing

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the crime rate

crime

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and

job

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training could guarantee a future full of prosperity.

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policy may not work for who had committed a serious

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such

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as murdering a person. In

this

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case these

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case, these

criminals deserve their sins and should be kept in

prison

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and taken away from their basic human rights which is freedom.

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may guarantee a safety for others in society.

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, it is obvious to all that the cost of running a

prison

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is too much. The

money which

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money, which

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spends

on running a

prison

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, could be spent on something else that benefit the society as well. In

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case, on building schools. At the same time, we should overlook the fact that not only people can affect each other in a negative

way

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prison

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, but

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they can turn into a resentful person as well. All things considered, I am led to believe

that of

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that, of

course

prison

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is always a quick and can be said an easy answer to committing a

crime

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, but given the level of

crime

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, we should have different

rehab

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program and

prison

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is not the answer to committing a

crime

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

369 words

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