A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Increase number of people realize that

cattles

domesticated bovine animals as a group regardless of sex or age

cattle

should not be

use

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used

public

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the public instead

instead

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they

objective case of they

them

have

similar right

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similar rights

a similar right

humen being

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a human being

human being

human beings

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while some disagree that

humens

all of the living human inhabitants of the earth

humans

must focus on their basic different needs, like take for balance diet and scientific experiments.In my opinion

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one

can not

cannot

deny from that fact that everything which are the part of society have a some rights

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whoever animals are the main sources of our community, so obviously they have need equal manners while others side animals

also

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for

advancemnt

encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something

advancement

advancements

in research. On the one hand

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Its

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is our duty to realize that animals have a same feeling as

humen

characteristic of humanity

human

beings but

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beings, but

it is

naturley

as might be expected

naturally

fact that they could not explain their

feeling

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feelings

by tongue, so its our responsibilities to care and provided

shalter

a structure that provides privacy and protection from danger

shelter

them because we are taking huge benefits from

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cattle's

countless

despite

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Despite

these advantages lots of others benefits like if some people have medical problems

such

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as in children have rickets disease and in

adults osteoporsis

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adults, osteoporosis

adults osteoporosis

abnormalilty

an abnormal physical condition resulting from defective genes or developmental deficiencies

abnormality

, doctors

adviced

having the benefit of careful prior consideration or counsel

advised

advice

to drink cow milk

reqularly

in a regular manner

regularly

basis and

tke

carry out

take

relief of

such

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dificiences

the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable

deficiencies

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Today world sciences and technology had invented

huge advance medical treatmnet

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a huge advance medical treatment

huge advance medical treatment

and other invention to use skins and bones of animals to produce drugs and vaccinations

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recently in one of the Europen country

scientist

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scientists

introduced a drug for the patients of

anemia

a deficiency of red blood cells

anaemia

, he did use the skin of

goat

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a goat

the goat

goats

. In conclusion

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If we protect and care our animals so in foreseeable future lots of other benefits get from them unless harm and kill them.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

249 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Exploitation
Animal welfare
Ethical treatment
Vegetarianism
Veganism
Cognitive dissonance
Humane
Live stock
Cruelty-free
Bioethics
Conservation
Habitat preservation
Ecosystem
Biodiversity
Animal testing
Synthetic biology
Genetic engineering
Speciesism
Animal husbandry
Sustainable farming

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