You are shifting out of your accommodation. You think the place is suitable for your English speaking colleague who is arriving next month. Write a letter to your colleague- - explain why you are shifting out. - Describe your accommodation - Why is it suitable for your friend?

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Dear Dave, Hope

this

letter finds you in

radiat

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radiant

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health and

the

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best of spirits. I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I am moving to Lahore from Islamabad because of landing a new job. Let me tell you in detail. You may have

know

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that I was searching for

a better job opportunities

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better job opportunities

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Fortunatley

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Fortunately

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last

week I got a call from a prestigious telecom company to join as a finance manager with better perks and

privilges

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privileges

. I am glad to tell you that I am going to join

this

organization in a new city. As you told me you are looking to rent a house in my city because of your job placement. I'm glad to tell you that you can hire my current

appartment

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apartment

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am leaving

this

week. It is a

two bedroom

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flat with attached bathrooms.

In addition

, there is a large kitchen and a drawing room for guests. I would like to suggest it

beacuse

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because

it is not only near to your new office but

also

located in

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city

center

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, there is a range of international

resturaunts

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restaurants

nearby and a huge supermarket.

Therefore

, it would be better for you to move without a delay. I look forward to hearing from you! Yours lovingly, Farrukh

Submitted by farrukh.maqsood on Tue Dec 03 2019

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

215 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You are shifting out of your accommodation. You think the place is suitable for your English speaking colleague who is arriving next month. Write a letter to your colleague- - explain why you are shifting out. - Describe your accommodation - Why is it suitable for your friend?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea while others disagree strongly with. Consider both sides of this debates and present your own idea. You should give reasons for your answer and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience

the chart about eating habits for american between 2003 adn 2013

In many developing nations, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the future, there will be a higher proportion of older people than young people in many countries. Is it a positive or negative development?