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Everyone loves to listen
music
, and many people even
loves
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love
 to sing as well. Nowadays, there are many who
likes
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like
 to stream and download
music
 on their devices rather than
buy
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by
 traditional records, C.D's, and D.V.D's. In the given essay, I will look at both these sides and present my opinion on the same. Earlier, there was a time, when able to buy a cassette and a
music
 player was a big thing. At that time, musicians used to get a lot of fame, and any new launch used to be like a one big
event providing
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event, providing
 fame
to
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for
 singer and people who are involved in the making. To illustrate, when Michael Jackson used to launch his
album it
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album, it
 used to get sold out within days, which used to generate extreme revenue for the team. Whereas, if you see now the scenario is totally opposite, and there is nothing like no stock available, due to digital copy. In recent years, digitization has brought in tremendous opportunity to every singer out there in the world to release their songs anywhere in the world.
This
 has been one of the biggest reasons, why western
music
 is able to come to India.
For example
, Indians were famous for their classical
music
, but now there are many locals who love rock, and other forms of
music
, which was earlier not present in the country.
Although
, due to the presence of downloading piracy has increased, resulting in lower profits for the community. In my opinion, there are more advantages than disadvantages, as the overall audience has increased,
thus
 increasing market size and potential. Unfortunately, the risk of theft has
also
increased but
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increased, but
 with a little care that can be eradicated to support the growth.
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