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Genetic engineering is a dangerous trend. It should be limited. To what extent do you agree?

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Genetic engineering all over the world has
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
 developed more since duplication sheep which is called Dolly found. There are benefits and downsides in
this
 great biotechnology. I will argue that the genetic engineering has affected to live longer and to live a better life.
However
, I think that we should consider its
unexpectable
 and negative effects at a same time.
To begin
 with, people can live longer with treatment and they can eat much better food from GMO products.
For instance
, after the stem cell was discovered, incredibly, many patients who are suffering from incurable diseases can become to be curable.
In addition
, the genetic manipulated crops have so strong features against pests that we can eat good quality
foods and
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foods, and
 it is
also
 environmentally-friendly because of the decreasing usage of pesticides and fertilizers.
Hence
, I’ve
assorted
confidently declared to be so
asserted
 that the genetic engineering makes us healthier and our life expectancy becomes longer.
In contrast
, we shouldn’t overlook negative aspects of the genetic engineering. The development of the genetic engineering can lead ethic issues and side effects. We don’t know well about these problems yet because it has only around 30
year’s
Suggestion
year
years’
 history. In fact, the Dolly as a successful result lived for 7
years but
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years, but
 it had some problems.
Therefore
, I believe that the genetic engineering could be so dangerous that we should take into account its problem when we get it. In conclusion,
although
 there are some
unexpectable
 downsides, I think that the genetic engineering should be encouraged in order to live a better life on one condition which we should consider negative effects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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