IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #road #safety #limits #vehicles
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
People's opinions differ about the most effective
way
Use synonyms
 of curbing road accidents. While some opine that reduction of the optimum speed limit is the
way
Use synonyms
 forward, others think there are more effective methods to address the situation. In my opinion, I succumb to the fact that there are various ways of achieving safety on the highway. On the one hand, the reduced maximum speed limit is considered the most appropriate
way
Use synonyms
 of minimising road mishaps.
That is
Linking Words
 to say, when there is a barrier to speed, drivers would not have a choice rather than to obey and
this
Linking Words
 would in turn reduce the frequency at which they run into other vehicles, pedestrians or stationary objects. Invariably making the roads safer to tread.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, others believe there are more preferable ways and I agree with
this
Linking Words
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the authorities should ensure that all drivers are lawfully licensed and offenders should be prosecuted appropriately. Since some accidents are due to amateur drivers plying the highways.
Secondly
Linking Words
, there should be a measure in place in monitoring the state of the vehicles and unqualified ones be withdrawn from the roads.
This
Linking Words
 would not only minimize accidents, but all reduce health hazards due to the emissions from them.
Lastly
Linking Words
, long and heavy-duty vehicles should be restricted during peak periods.
For instance
Linking Words
, Lagos State has recorded a 78% reduction in road accidents since
this
Linking Words
 law was enacted.
Moreover
Linking Words
, these vehicles have been known to be the cause of over 60% of these accidents. In conclusion, despite the various views of people about the best
way
Use synonyms
 to achieve safety on the roads, I believe that ensuring licensing of drivers, vehicle are in good conditions and restricting the movement of long vehicles will.
Submitted by Mabel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: