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In addition to your full-time job, you are taking a 15-hour Computer Science course. You now find that you cannot continue with the course. Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter: -Describe your schedule and situation -Explain why you cannot continue the course -Say what action you would like to take Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows, Dear Ms. Franklin,

#addition #job #-hour #computer #science #course #tutor #-describe #schedule #situation #-explain #-say #action #addresses #ms #franklin
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Dear Ms. Franklin, My name is Trang Dao. I am a student in your Computer Science
course
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. I am writing to apologize for not continuing to attend your class because of some issues.
Firstly
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, my company just assigned me to follow a
project
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 that required me to move to Hanoi and work there for three months.
This
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 is a critical
project
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, and it will affect the company's future.
Therefore
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, I can not help but leave Hochiminh City for a
while
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, which means I am unable to continue to take
this
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course
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 temporarily. At the moment, I am staying in Hanoi, and the
course
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 does not provide virtual lessons.
In addition
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, I have to devote most of my time to the
project
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 tasks. For that reason, I am resorting to dropping out of
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course
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 to focus on the
project
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. I am aware that
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course
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 will be re-opened in January. Coincidentally, I will return to Hochiminh next January after the
project
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 is finished. Would it be possible for me to join the cohort at that time? I would appreciate it if I was offered
such
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 a good chance. I appreciate your understanding. Best Regards, Trang Dao
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task achievement
Ensure all parts of the task are addressed evenly to avoid missing key information.
coherence cohesion
Consider adding a transition sentence to enhance the flow between paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and conveys professionalism.
coherence cohesion
The structure is clear, with each paragraph addressing a specific point.
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