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Natural talents are more important than working hard to achieve success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern society, Natural talents are thought more important than hard-working. Actually, there are lots of gifted people in different fields. The essay is aimed here to argue intelligence and diligence are both important. On the one hand, some fields need people have gifts or they cannot achieve success.
For instance
, as a scientist, gifts are very useful in scientific research and it's easy to find a lot of famous scientists with talents
such
 as Einstein, Newton and so on. Meanwhile, not only in the field of science, but
also
 in art, Many artists show their talents. Mozart can compose a song when he was 4 years old. DaVinci creates many well-known paintings and draw a lot of invention on his hand draft.
On the other hand
, diligence is the basis of achieving success.
Although
 people who are brilliant like Da Vinci, they
also
 do a large number of practice. Before Da Vinci become a painter, he practiced drawing an egg every day. It sounds very boring to repeat to do something again and again,
however
,
this
 is what these brilliant people
also
 do. Nobody can be skilled before a lot of practice,
however
 talented they are. Talents may decide how successful we can achieve, whereas how hard-working can decide what achievements people can get basically. To conclude, people see the talents of many smart people but not notice how these genius diligent.
Thus
, it seems that natural gifts and work hard are both important to achieve success. With our technology development, diligent people will be more valued in the future.
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