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Write a letter to a friend who you have met on an overseas trip in an English speaking country. Ask for him to send you the trips photographs.

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Dear Dave, Hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing
this
 letter to ask request you to send me the photographs which we took
last
 week on
trip
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a trip
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 to England. It was really a memorable visit for us. I was really excited about it and
i
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 am really happy
how
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with how
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 it turned out. For
me
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 the best part of
trip
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the trip
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 was visiting the heritage museum and salam Mall. I am glad that we captured our moments of joy thanks to your 40
mega
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megapixel
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pixel
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pixels
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sonay
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sony
 digital camera. I hope that you have already developed selected pictures digitally ,
therefore
, send me a soft copy
on
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 my email address [email protected]. Could you please tell me that you framed our which pictures
.
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 Please
also
 suggest
me
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to me
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that
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which one will be suitable for me to hang on my bedroom wall. Hoping to receive photographs soon!
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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