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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data about the percentages of
students
 who enrolled at Manchester University from 1937 to 2017.
Overall
, the table compares the percentages of
students
 who were female and male.
In addition
,
students
 came from within 40 miles of the city and from abroad. The total of new student enrolments
was
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gradually increased for 80
years
. The number of enrolments in 1937 was only 327, after 80
years
 being 6254 (
as
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approximately 20 times growth as it was for the first time.). In 1937, the percentages of local
students
 were 55%, and that of international
students
 from only 4 countries was 6%. After 80
years
, the number of local
students
was
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suddenly dropped by about 1%. Surprisingly, the number of international
students
, who came from 102 countries steeply grew to 32% of the total between 1967 and 2017. The
proportions
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 of female enrolments decreased from 45% to 35% within 30
years
, but after 50
years
 steadily rose to 55%. Meanwhile, that of male
students
 gradually climbed 65% between 1937 and 1967, but noticeably declined to 45% in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment numbers
  • increase/decrease in student numbers
  • post-war baby boom
  • globalization
  • technological advancement
  • education accessibility
  • demographic changes
  • overseas students
  • gender representation in education
  • international reputation
  • higher education
  • university capacity
  • social factors
  • economic influences
  • political factors
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