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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the trend of
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an aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
, specifically
people
 who
65
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are 65
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 and above, from 1940 to 2040 in the
USA
,
Swedan
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Sweden
 and
Japan
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the percentage of elderly
people
 is predicted to
be increase
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 significantly over
the
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time period.
Further
,
Japan
 had
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 less proportion of senior
citizen
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citizens
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 in 1940 when compared to
other
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the other
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 two countries,
however
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this
 pattern is forecasted to change in 2040 when
Japan
 will be overtook the
USA
 and
Swedan
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Sweden
.
According to
 the graph, in 1940, around 10% of the total
population
 in America consisted
with
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people
who
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aged 65 years or more and
this
 was followed by
Swedan
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Sweden
 and
Japan
, at nearly 7.5% of the total and 5 % respectively. With
the
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time, the percentage of the
aging
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population
was
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fluctuated until around 1996 in
Swedan
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Sweden
 and the
USA
 and
then
,
Swedan
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Sweden
 exceeded the
USA
 in nearly 1997. Apart from the few expected fluctuation,
Swedan
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Sweden
 will be expected to have 25% of elderly
people
 in 2040. Meanwhile,
Japan
shown
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 a minimal up and down, and plateau trend until 2000 and
thereafter
, the predicted proportion will be substantially climbed up and reached
to
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just above 25% in 2040. The least number of
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aging
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population
 will be in the
USA
 in 2040 , at nearly 22%.
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