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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The population has been increasing in different nations all over the world and
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. In
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nation's
 population should use their money for
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care
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 in the future. I disagree with
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 point of view. On the one hand, when people should pay for medical service to use them.
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argues
 that people would use it reasonable if they must to pay for it. The main disadvantages of
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 would be that some personal has to see the doctor whenever they get
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a tiny scratch
tiny scratches
 on their body or they not good feelings. Another drawback is human believe that paying for using
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 would help people understand their knowledge of protect as well as prevent themselves from
disase
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
 regularly.
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is not effected
does not effect
doesn't effect
has not effected
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having
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 exists, the proportion of illness is still high.
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 is not an approach to all patients.
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be heavier than
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 for citizens. People beings to pay for personal tax from their salary on the monthly basis, so do not need to pay for treatment if they get sick, any
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care
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 costs are already paid for through general tax.
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, free
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 over the world means the government in a country can offer an approach to treatment to many people and
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 often prevents diseases in society. In conclusion,
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 some community in many nations could pay for their
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 provision,
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 believe that its advantages
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be heavier than
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outweighed
 the disadvantages.

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