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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The population has been increasing in different nations all over the world and
this
 could put a lot of pressure on government about
health
care
. In
this
 fact, a
nations
Suggestion
nation's
 population should use their money for
health
care
 in the future. I disagree with
this
 point of view. On the one hand, when people should pay for medical service to use them.
Supporter
Suggestion
A supporter
 of
this
 view
argue
Suggestion
argues
 that people would use it reasonable if they must to pay for it. The main disadvantages of
this
 would be that some personal has to see the doctor whenever they get
tiny scratch
Suggestion
a tiny scratch
tiny scratches
 on their body or they not good feelings. Another drawback is human believe that paying for using
health
care
 would help people understand their knowledge of protect as well as prevent themselves from
disase
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
 regularly.
However
,
this
 thinking
is not effect
Suggestion
is not effected
does not effect
doesn't effect
has not effected
 as much.
For example
, Vietnam is a country
have
Suggestion
having
 many private medical
care
 exists, the proportion of illness is still high.
Therefore
,
this
 is not an approach to all patients.
On the other hand
, I would argue that these drawbacks are
outweighted
be heavier than
outweighed
 by the benefits about supports providing free medical
care
 for citizens. People beings to pay for personal tax from their salary on the monthly basis, so do not need to pay for treatment if they get sick, any
health
care
 costs are already paid for through general tax.
Moreover
, free
health
care
 over the world means the government in a country can offer an approach to treatment to many people and
this
 often prevents diseases in society. In conclusion,
although
 some community in many nations could pay for their
health
care
 provision,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that its advantages
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
outweighed
 the disadvantages.

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