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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion

#people #internet #communities
It is considered that few people realize that social networking sites combined to each other while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 feel that human beings and society away from each other, I think that
internet
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the internet
 is a most essential tool in our life in
this
centure
proceed somewhere despite the risk of possible dangers
venture
centre
censure
, because each and
everyhting
all things
everything
 selling or
perchasing
the act of buying
purchasing
 through online and every private, government and semi government sector and organization is doing their work or business through social sites.
while
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While
 disconnected from
such
 advances
facilties
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
 are beneficial in some cases the excess use
also
 harmful for body. On the one hand, having
a
Suggestion
an
 internet
facilities
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facility
 on the every corner of life
,
Accept space
,
these sides made global as a small home because whenever someone
whats
what thing
what
what's
 to communicate with their families parents those
use
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uses
such
 sites like
whatspp
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a wasp
wasp
wasps
the wasp
,
Accept space
,
messenger and
wechat
Suggestion
we chat
.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
Most parents should notice their
childer
alcoholic drink from fermented cider
cider
shoulder
shoulders
 to usage of children are dangerous for their health
,
Accept space
,
despite
,
Accept space
,
these
disadvatnge
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
 lot of advantages for adults and teenagers for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 studies and university and college
assingments
a duty that you are assigned to perform (especially in the armed forces)
assignments
 and for research projects to do
easy
Suggestion
easier
 by
internet
Suggestion
the internet
.
Finally
,
My
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 opine is that hug facilities through
introduced
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introducing
 these services, in
foreseeable futur lot
Suggestion
a foreseeable future lot
foreseeable future lot
foreseeable future lots
 of
advansment
encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something
advancement
advancements
 will be
launch
Suggestion
launched
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