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Some people think that these days people have too much options. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many may believe that the people of today have an abundance of choices that might not have been available in the past. I think that we are provided with too many options. What should I eat for lunch today?
This
 question has grown to be difficult with time as several restaurants are now available to pick from. Lunch was once a basic task, get nutrients into my body, that has evolved into the aim of satisfying one's taste buds. The simple action that would require a short amount of time to complete is now extended by adding decision making in the process. I have observed coworkers getting frustrated trying to decide where to go for lunch, one even skipped lunch because she was not able to make up her mind
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 Another area of our lives
that is
 affected by increased options is affairs of the heart. There is a plethora of dating sites, mobile apps and social spaces
that
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 available to us; advertising the many different shapes, size,
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
 and other attributes of possible mates that we can choose from. With so many to choose from we often add to our list of expectations qualities we
initially
 were never interested in until it was presented to us, ever increasing the difficulty of choosing a suitable partner. In concluding, while having options is great, when we are overloaded with possibilities people tend to select poorly than if they were limited. Less choices result in better decisions.

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