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Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally more nurturing than aggressive. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In today’s contemporary world, gender differences are of little
value be
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value, be
 it in
characters
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the characters
 or the genre of work they perform.
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, some people opine that the female
are considered
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is considered
 more tranquil and nourishing by birth rather than their other counterpart.
This
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highlight, although
although
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 most women are of
such
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 qualities,
nonetheless
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 there are men who are serene and supporting as the opposite sex.
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 with,
the gentle
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the gentler
 sex
are believed
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is believed
 to be
calm
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calmer
 and less violent as they inculcate
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 properties from their mother.
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 is what they scrutinize throughout their childhood, as propound women are the homemaker and men the breadwinner in
family
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the family
a family
. To cite an example, according to record in the schools of Nepal, several
combat
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combats
 happen within boys rather than the girls. Provided that, it is fair enough to say that ladies usually avoid a heinous situation as well as are more capable of handling difficult circumstances.
On the other hand
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, male were assumed more hostile and neglecting in the past.
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, things have changed and we can inspect men having different characters as the aforementioned. Since nowadays both genders are equally involved in household chores as well as office works, they don’t single
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 handle the financial situations themselves, anticipating more time to relax and spend time with loved ones. 60% of women today possess an employment which aids in contributing to the family’s finances
similarly
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 like men as stated by the Finance Ministry of India.
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, in recent years the gender inequality in the character
have disappeared
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has disappeared
 in a huge proportion which can be visibly observed. In conclusion,
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 has nothing to do with the sex of a
person but
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person, but
 rather depends on circumstances and various conditions in life. So, raising finger to a particular gender as being argumentative or worrisome is completely nuisance.
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