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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preferance to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is irrefutable that working environment plays a crucial role in everyone's life. Few
nation
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nations
 hold
this
 point that doing
work
 in a huge
company
 is pivotal
,
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,
on the other hand
 others said working in a small area is better than
big
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big companies
a big company
company
.Both views have their own points.In the upcoming paragraphs I will describe both views and
then
 give my perspective.
First
 of all the
person
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people
 who think that working in big companies is pivotal they think
this
 because of big companies give more knowledge and experience because these types of companies have tie up with foreign companies.So the
person
 can
work
 with bigger connection.
For example
, Google
company
 is
very big
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a very big company
company
 and all of the world have their branches.
As a result
 employee
learn
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learns
 more when they
work
 in these types of companies.
Furthermore
,
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,
in a big offices chance of
permotion
a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution
promotion
 is more than
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 form and workers do their
work
 with full enthusiasm to get
higher position
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a higher position
. On the other side of
coin
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the coin
 the people who think that working in a small firm is
better
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better, this
this
 is because of small companies have less burden of
work
.
Person
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A person
The person
 can easily do that
work
 without any tension.
Secondly
, tinny offices have less competition and
a
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an
employees
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employee
 can grow their business easily. According to my opinion, working in a large firm is better than working in a small office
person
 can learn more when he or she can
work
 in a big area.
Secondly
person
meet
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meets
 different
countries people
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countries, people
 and enhance their knowledge while working
.
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.
 Apart from
this
,
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,
bigger companies give more income than
other
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the other
. To sum up, working in both
area
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areas
have
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has
 their own
points but
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points, but
 I am
favour
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favoured
 with
first point
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the first point
.
Individual
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An individual
The individual
 can get more experience while working in big companies.Not only knowledge is
increase but
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increasing, but
increasing but
increased but
 chances of
permotion
a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution
promotion
too
in the direction of
to
 rise.

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