Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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In the modern century, the world suffers from the increase of

crime

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rate throughout many nations.

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eventually breeds

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eventually breed

the fear of innocent civilians and forces them to demand stronger punishment on those who committed a

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. Some insist giving prisoners longer

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sentence, and others insist alternative ways will be more effective and I lay my thoughts alongside the alternative ways as well. There are many benefits of sentencing offenders longer

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period. The longer the criminals who committed serious damage to

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others, such

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as steal, violence, arson and murder are separated from the society, the higher the chances of the innocence being safe increases dramatically. During the time in

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, the offenders will have an opportunity to get them rehabilitated through

many services

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the many services

available inside.

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, they could reflect their own behaviour and educate themselves the way not to re-offend once they are released.

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long period of the

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sentence will work as a deterrent to future criminals.

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, others argue that there are more effective ways to reduce the

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rate. They insist that sparing their

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lives

after committing serious crimes involving one’s life will be only wasting the tax that citizens paid.

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sentence to death will show a powerful warning to other, which result in a stiff drop in

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rate. In my opinion, these people can be of the

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service, to

the whole community during their imprisonment. The labour force from these criminals will be a great contribution to the societies. It does not imply that these violent and dangerous people will be released and walk around the inner city freely. They will be under heavy supervision.

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, they will be tied to the heavy chains and placed

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construction sites to assist the building companies or they could be working as farmers when the harvesting season comes. To summarise, there are clear grounds both for and against long imprisonment.

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the government must protect innocent lives from brutal and reckless criminals by researching the best method out of all these fine arguments.

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