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The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Radio, television and the internet repeat newses and stories about the lives and relationships of famous people
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 as actors, singers, footballers and etc.
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 I agree and believe we should know about the lives of celebrities and I do not think that the media should spend more time to repeat the lives of ordinary people
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. In my point, famous people are good models for everyone. Because one day, they were ordinary people. And when the media keep narrating and writing about the lives of these people, we can learn lots of things from them. Actually, their lives can be a good proof for those, who have big dreams. Because they will figure out that life might be hard, but if we keep practicing, concentrating on our aim(s) and believing in ourselves, we can get what we want.
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, some people believe focus on celebrities lives have bad effects on people's lives.
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, it causes spending too much time on fashions or teenager's behaviour. Some of them start to act in the exact way that their favourite singer or actor does. They think it is very important that we know about the lifestyle of ordinary people. Whereas, we can get more motivation and learn more by knowing that how many famous people work hard to achieve the things that they want. How they fight with their problems and defeat them. In conclusion, I assume the media have to focus on famous people's lives. We should know about successful people. About their condition in their lifetime. Because if we pay more attention to the lives of ordinary people, it will be hard to open a new horizon

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