People have to spend more and more time to travel their homes for jobs and study. What are the reasons? How can wo solve this problem?

Nowadays, individuals want to purchase their own
vehicles
because they like to
travel
in their personal
vehicles
such
as
car
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cars
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,
bike
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bikes
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and many more. They use these
vehicles
for going to jobs and other purposes and expended more
time
to
travel
. I will explain the causes
as well as
solutions
of
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this
problem in the
further
paragraphs.
To begin
with, the first reason
of
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this
problem is
traffic
.
People
prefer to
travel
in their own
vehicles
, so it leads
traffic
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on roads.
For instance
, in recent years, a number of
people
spend
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their money
for
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on
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buying personal
vehicles
and
travel
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travelling
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in their
vehicles
. For that reason, day by day
traffic
is increasing on the roads so,
people
spend
their
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more
time
to
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travelling
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travel
.
Moreover
,
people
can
travel
on public
transportation
as well as
they prefer to
travel
whole
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family in their own
vehicles
.
Thus
,
traffic
is reduced on the roads and
people
cannot
be expend
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expend
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their more
time
to
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travelling
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travel
. Moving
further
to the second cause of
this
problem is the condition of public
transportation
. In the modern era,
people
cannot
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like to wait for buses and trains, so they do not
travel
in public
transportation
have
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and have
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their fixed
time
that
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which
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is why
people
wait more to
travel
. For that reason, everyone prefers to
travel
in their own
vehicles
.
Therefore
,
government
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should
be improved
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public
transportation
and increase
vehicles
for public
transportation
as well as
reduce the amount of
travel
in public
transportation
and
increased
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the amount of petrol and diesel. So,
people
can
travel
on public
transportation
and cannot
be spent
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spend
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their
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a
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huge
time
to
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travelling
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travel
.
To conclude
,
people
use their own
vehicles
for
their
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crucial
purpose
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purposes
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like going to hospitals and other personal issues.
Also
, the government should
be improved
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improve
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public
transportation
.

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