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Every year several langauges die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There is no denying the fact that extinct
languages
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 have become a topic of discussion in recent years. 
While
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 some
people
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 believe it is better to have fewer
languages
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 because it will make life easier for
individuals
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 and society, I firmly disagree, as
language
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 represents a person's cultural heritage. In the following paragraphs, I will outline the reasons behind my opinion and provide relevant examples.
To begin
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 with,
language
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 plays a key role in shaping
people
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's identity, and losing a
language
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 often means losing part of who they are.
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, it reflects their uniqueness and the way
individuals
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 express themselves. More importantly, a nation's history is closely connected to its
language
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, as many historical records and books are written in it.
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this
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 reason, many
people
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 who study history are bilingual, as they understand the importance and value of
languages
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.
In addition
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, I believe having multiple
languages
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 is important because it reflects the diversity among
people
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 and helps
individuals
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 develop valuable skills.
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, learning a new
language
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 can strengthen the brain and boost confidence. From a professional perspective, it can
also
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 improve career opportunities, as employers often value multilingual employees.
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, many workers have been promoted because they are fluent in more than one
language
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. In conclusion,
although
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 many
people
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 have different views, I believe
individuals
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 should be more aware of the importance of their
language
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 and make efforts to teach it to others so that it does not vanish.
For
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this
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 reason,
this
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 issue should be taken seriously for the benefit of both
individuals
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 and society.

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task
State a clear view in the intro and keep it in all body paragraphs.
coherence
Add a paragraph that presents the other view and then refute it.
development
Give more precise, real examples to back each reason.
grammar
Use more varied sentence patterns and check small grammar errors.
task
The position is clear early in the piece.
coherence
Good use of joiners to show steps.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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