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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching TV. Why do they do this?. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?.

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Nowadays, it has become very common that people try to imitate celebrities who are their
role
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models
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Models
 by watching them on TV or by reading articles on them. There are various reasons that
people
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People
 tend to copy these celebrities. In my opinion, it is not a good idea to copy famous people and I believe that it is a mere waste of time and effort.
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 with,
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 of the crucial aspects is that many of the common people are fans of
actors
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the actors
or
introduces an alternative
Or
 sports celebrities and worship their
role
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 model by mimicking their actions and characteristics. The common people who are fans have a tendency to be famous and talented like their
role
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 models.
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; some people try to put on
clothes having
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clothes, having
 pictures of their
role
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 model to attract attention and fame.
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, luxurious lifestyle of famous people attracts the common people to mimic them and in return they end up spending their money unnecessarily.
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, every individual has a personality and an inborn talent. Rather than spending time on
copying
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Copying
 others,
one
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 should try to find his own path to success.
Although
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 the lifestyle of
celebrities
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Celebrities
 may be attractive, they have to compromise many important values like family, good friends, privacy and so on. Copying their fashion or lifestyle would not bring any static happiness to
one
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's life.
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; there are many young women who try to diet and achieve a zero figure like actresses. Most of these young women end up in poor health conditions. To conclude, stardom along with luxury and fame attracts common people and they tend to
copy
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Copy
 their celebrities. In my opinion, copying famous people never make anyone successful and happy. To achieve success in life,
one
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 has to find his own path.
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