In some countries, fastfood restaurant and supermarket give money to school to promote their products.do you think this is a positive development or negatively development?

Now a day advertisement is a source with the
help
of
this
people
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person
can explore their business in
this
global market.In some
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
fastfood
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fast food
Restaurant and supermarket give money to
school
to
promot
contribute to the progress or growth of
promote
their products.As per my view of point negative
development
is more than positive. If
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am talking about positive
development
then
with the
help
of
this
school
can expand their
education
level,
school
management
provide
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provides
education
to more an more children and
also
provide better service to them.Like, better classroom, educational material etc.Another one
,
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,
school
provide
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provides
high standard salary
to
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for
faculty.With the
help
of
this
increase the moral of the faculty and get satisfaction.
the
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The
school
must be use
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must use
this
fund in
such
activities like sports, health, economy etc.In
this
children
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child
get scope to improve their ability.
For instance
,
school
management
arrange
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arranges
sports
dat
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DAT
at
some time
such
helthcamp
.
However
, negative
development
more affect to the children's
.
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.
fast
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Fast
food items very
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
for the children and
school
promote their products
then
they
also
attrect
direct toward itself or oneself by means of some psychological power or physical attributes
attract
attracted
with
this
and demand from the
perents but
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parents, but
parents but
if
perents
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
should not allow
then
it's
create
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created
negative impect
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a negative impact
negative impact
negative impacts
for
perents
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parents
in children's
mond
that which is responsible for one's thoughts and feelings; the seat of the faculty of reason
minds
mound
.In
this
children
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child
do some antisocial activities like theft or some crime.
Such
type of things like mobile
,
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,
bike or
such
gadget.
this
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This
all
create
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creates
negative
development
on children's
education
as well as their life.Now a day children's most connect with the social media and get down score in
education
. In conclusion
,
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,
there are so many
source
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sources
for the promotion of
products but
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products, but
promotion with the
help
of the
school
is not a right way.So as per my point of view it's play negative role in children's life so they must be apply some other source of the promotion.

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