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Nowadays most of the people prefer using keyboard for their assignments and they are not used pen or pencil. Discuss the both points give your opinion

#people #keyboard #assignments #pen #pencil #points
While
 some people argue that the usage of electronic devices to complete their
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 is preferable, others still prefer the
old fashion
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 way. In my opinion, practicality is the key and in
this
 day of age, using the keyboard is preferred. On one side, having to use a pen, pencil, and
paper
 to write an essay is
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 habitual behaviour that has been used for a long time,
therefore
, it is not easy to break the habit.
For example
, my
60 years old
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60-year-old
 uncle is still very proudly wearing his Parker in
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 pocket of his shirt every single day. His hobby is to doodle in a
paper
 as a form of fidgeting. Despite the above argument, I hold the position that
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time is moving forward and all of us should adapt to
this
 enhancing technology movement.
Moreover
, the usage of
paper
 is not encouraged, as, it will advance the global warming situation that we
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 at the moment.
Also
, it is becoming more convenient and
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 to share documents with our
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 and
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 document version control comparable to
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 it manually which was messy. In conclusion,
while
 both views are commonly held in society, I believe that technology is the way to go. We can contribute to preserving our Earth by using less
paper
 and plastics as the effect of producing fancy stationeries. Given
this
 situation, more training should be available for
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member
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 to keep up with the current technology and
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 up with the
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 of the working industry.

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task response
Ensure that the essay clearly addresses both points of view given in the prompt and provides a well-structured argument.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-presented, and the essay is generally cohesive. However, work on improving the logical flow of ideas within paragraphs for better coherence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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